Figures show that some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of the population who are aged 15 or younger. What do you think are the current and future effects of this trend for those countries?

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proportion of

population

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the population

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of all age groups is an important aspect

for

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the social,

economical

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and

overall

growth of a

country

.

However

, in many

countries

the number of younger

population

who are less than 15 years old has increased significantly and to a certain extent

this

has a detrimental effect on the

society

, workforce and the

country

.

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the current and

future

effects of

this

trend in

countries

where

younger

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the younger

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generation predominates the bigger portion of their

population

. With

regards

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to the current effect,

an

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increasing competition in schools is obvious. Since younger generations are mostly

school goers

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, parents would have to suffer to get their

children

admitted

in

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a good school

due to

excessive competition. Many poor parents would be forced to send their

children

to work and earn and

this

will increase

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child labour in many developing and underdeveloped

countries

.

Finally

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the disproportion of

population

age distribution in

such

countries

will lead

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to the scarcity of skilled

labours

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labourers

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and other professionals.

Finally

, since those

children

are not earning members, that would negatively affect the

overall

economy of the

country

. Increasing

younger

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the younger

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population

, though

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mainly thought to bring negative effects to the

society

and

country

,

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not always a burden. They can support their community, become better members of

the

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society

through positive competition and can contribute to the family by sharing the workload. Considering the

future

effects of

this

trend, I believe that it would mostly depend on the economic factors and job facilities of a

country

. If the

country

has

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great economic stability and can create plenty of job opportunities in the

future

, the under-aged

population

now would become the de facto to the economy in the

future

and that would enable the

country

to develop rapidly. The

country

will have a huge

workers

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and professionals in the

future

and they

would

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be able to increase the GDP of

such

a

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country

.

On the contrary

, if the

country

fails to ensure jobs and business

opportunity

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opportunities

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when those

children

will become adults, the outcome would be catastrophic. The unemployment and crime rate would surely increase and that would negatively affect the

society

.

To conclude

,

although

a right proportion of

population

age distribution is necessary,

this

is not the case in many

countries

. Based on a

countries

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economic condition, education, training, and job facilities, the increasing younger generation can be a great

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or burden.