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Mnay museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not local people. why do you think it happens? what can be done to attract local visitors to these sites?

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Tourism is an increasingly popular industry. Countries are trying their level best to promote museums and historical sites. It contributes to the profit earned by the government and is used for providing better facilities to the localities. Many people argue that these sites
are only being visited
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have only been visited
 by foreign tourists and local people do not prefer to
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 them.
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 essay will discuss the reasons why local people do not
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 the local sites and put forth some solutions for the same. Local people do not prefer visiting the local museums mainly because of the paid tickets for adults and children, whereas foreigners get free entry. They do believe that when they are considered as outsiders
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 their own
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place, then
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 why should they give them the importance?
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, they must face the problems related to parking and the foreigners get the special reserved parking spot. To add to it, whilst visiting the local monuments they do not feel that they are on vacation. The main reason behind
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 is the lack of awareness about the history and the importance of the tourist places.
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, in Toronto, people working in downtown can watch the CN Tower whenever they come out on the streets. Reports say that 70% of people are unaware of the history of the tower and have not visited it from inside. It is of utmost importance to make people understand the value of a place,
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 only they will admire and respect the site. To solve the above-mentioned problems, the government must take effective steps.
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, they should add
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 in the textbook of primary and secondary school.
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 will make children aware and curious about their local tourist places.
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, proper advertisements should be enforced by the government. It will boost the knowledge of people and will create curiosity and awareness to
visit
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 them. To conclude, local people should
visit
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 the local museums and historical building.
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 will help them in developing knowledge about the place where they are living.
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