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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, controlling the children is very difficult. Many parents
spank
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Spank
 children as they think
this
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 is the best
way
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 of discipline.
This
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 essay will argue why smacking is completely unacceptable and not the best form of discipline. Many parents believe that spanking children is the right
way
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 to keep them in
control
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 because they may make mistakes which they are not aware of it. By doing
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, they will be more cautious. They are justifiably worried
about their children of
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about their children
 making mistakes which puts both of them in trouble.
On the other hand
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,
some
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Some
 people think that the traditional
way
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 of controlling children is the finest. A recent study done by the professor at the university of California states that "90 percent of the parents smack their children" to
control
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 them. There have been some recorded instances in
india where
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India, where
India where
 they use
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 orthodox approach to the children in order to avoid
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 mistakes.
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, they think beating is the only
way
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 to
control
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 their children. On the other side, there are many down side of doing
this
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. I understand why they do
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,
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however it
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however, it
 is spreading a negative
vibes
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vibe
 across
community
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the community
communities
a community
. One of the main effect is that, if children got an exposure to violence at an early age it will impact their mind.
For instance
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, a person at new
york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
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 was arrested and he states that "he was experienced to violence by their parents" that became him today. There are many ways to
control
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 them
for example
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, by abusing or shouting to keep them in
control
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.
Therefore
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, spanking is not the best
way
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.
This
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 essay argued why spanking children is completely unacceptable and not the best form of
discpline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
. In my opinion, I totally disagree as that would
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 them in their future.
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