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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many mentors hold the view that cross-cultural exchange program would bring advantageous benefits to all
student
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students
. From my perspective, disadvantageous though
such
 program can be, they can not undermine the advantages. On the one hand, oversea
student
 is likely to experience some difficulties to some extent. In terms of
finiancial
the act of financing
financing
finance
, a cross-border project is tend to be much prohibitively expensive than domestic
cources
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
causes
, making them inaccessible to participants.
For example
, students who come from developing countries find it hard to engage in
inteernational
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international
International
internationally
 projects due to difference in living standard between nations. Cultural shock is another common problem. Exchange
student
 might struggle with cultural dissimilarities leading to their homesickness and being isolated
,
Accept space
,
and thereby getting undesirable academic outcomes. My friend,
for example
, must re-sit due to language
barier
a structure or object that impedes free movement
barrier
barriers
.
On the other hand
, they get
further
 merits than
drawback
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a drawback
drawbacks
. Having taken part in
exchange program
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the exchange program
an exchange program
exchange programs
, they
not only stand
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aren't only standing
 a golden chance to get a deeper insight into a
culture but
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culture, but
also
 have favourable environment to improve their foreign language skills. Aforementioned
convenience
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conveniently
 serves as a stepping-stone for their future job. In our degree-based society,
moreover
, there is more likelihood for exchange
student
 to attract employer's attention. The longer they follow, the more attractive
their resume is
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is their resume
. In conclusion, in spite of facing with managing costly budgets, the positive aspects
this
 programme bring to
student
 are well-worth the cost.
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