Many countries are spending a huge amount of money on supporting their competitors to take part in some worldwide sports competitions. Others argue that it would be better if these countries can spend the money on children to take part in sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of whether a
country
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should spend a lot of
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on these competitors has sparked off an intense debate. Some people, as advocates, suggest that huge national expenditure on supporting these competitors to take
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in some worldwide sports competitions could improve the comprehensive state power.
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, other as opponents claim that to spend
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on children to take
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in sports activities would be better than support these competitors. To a certain extent, I agree with these opponents, with some reservations. I aim at discussing both
side
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sides
of the issue and put up my opinion. On the one hand, it has well accepted that participating more sports activities could improve the health of children.
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, nowadays, most of young generation
locks physical
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locks, physical
excises and are reluctant to take
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in sports.
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, every
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should implement policies to encourage and support
children
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children's
child's
sports activities.
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, the government can build more sports facilities fitting for children or set up scholarship for these positive young sport participants.
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, when the government could spend more and more
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on the
children
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children's
sports activities, the more benefits under the policies would address to children.
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, spending a huge amount of
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on supporting these professional competitors would encourage young children to take
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in the sports.
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of all, if a
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has a huge expenditure on world wild professional competitions,
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would directly encourage young children to be interested in sports and hope to be a professional
sportman
someone who engages in sports
sportsman
.
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, young people would be encouraged to take
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in the sports activities, when they can find that has been supported by their
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.
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, under a certain extent, I agree with these advocates to spend
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on these professional
sportmen
someone who engages in sports
sportsmen
sportsman
,
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the range of supporting should be controlled. To conclude, I concede that government should spend a huge amount of
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on supporting
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children's
sports, when these young
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generations
are the hope of the future.
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, I am convinced that
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the expenditure
on professional world wild sports activities are
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important, and which could effectively encourage, directly or indirectly these children to
participate sports
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participate in sports
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