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It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #course #children
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We see the dramatic changes in the service oriented businesses these days. Several coachings in the parental care arena have sprouted up from nowhere and proved to be a successful business model. Parents are both enthusiastic as well as
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 about its utility.
This
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 essay will examine the contesting arguments to arrive at some conclusion. The foremost reason which goes in favour of these coachings is that the percolation of accrued wisdom and experience about upbringing of children, over to
younger generation
Suggestion
a younger generation
the younger generation
, is hampered these days as more and more families are becoming nuclear.
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, many high paying jobs and better schools are available in cities only.
As a result
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, many people move to
such
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 cities from remote areas to earn their livelihood, while leaving behind their aging parents.
As a result
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 the new parents did not get the experience of rearing a child from their elders.
This
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 break of
flow
Suggestion
the flow
 of experience has compelled the new city dwelling parents to resort to parental coachings.
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 parental coachings are
boon
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a boon
 for many.
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, many
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 argue that these institutes provide a rather stereotypical education, a generalized one
to
Suggestion
with
 all their clients whereas every family has its own idiosyncratic set of beliefs and values.
For example
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 the joint families the nannies often engage a child and tell them stories about the values, the family cares most. As
such
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, the child grows up with characteristic
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 which is consistent with the family identity.
Thus
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 the parental care coachings are not
faourable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
. It can be concluded from
above discussion
Suggestion
the above discussion
 that though, nurturing the family characteristics and values are important, but given the compulsions of
nuclear family
Suggestion
the nuclear family
, the role of Parental care coachings cannot be denied.
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, these institutes must be regulated by enacting some governing statutory body.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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