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Some countries spend a lot of money ti make bicycle usage easier. whi is this? is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

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Nowadays, an enormous amount of money is used to encourage the use of
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bicycle
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bicycles
the bicycle
. The main reason
of
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for
this
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 trend is that
bicycle
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are
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is
 eco-friendly
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 it is a successful way to reduce traffic.
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, from my personal view I do not think it is not the ideal solution.
Firstly
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, it is undeniable that one of the main reasons of
pollution
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 is the increasing number of cars,
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 using a
bicycle
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 as a method of transportation will surely minimize the percentage rate of air
pollution
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. One clear example is that countries who promote cycling have less
pollution
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.
Secondly
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, it is commonly believed that cycling
reduce
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reduces
 traffic jam. It is obvious that the size of
bicycle
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 is smaller than a car.
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, one normal car can be substituted by four bicycles which lead to more people using the roads but with less traffic.
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, some governments claim that riding a
bicycle
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 is
then
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best solution
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the best solution
 to minimize congested roads. Even though I believe that riding bicycles
us
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
as
 one of the solutions, but it is not the ideal method if it is not applicable with other means.
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, people should start commuting by groups when they have a common destination and governments should improve public transportation in parallel with promoting the
usage
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use
 of
bicycle
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 to decrease the number of cars on the road which will
also
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 result to less
pollution
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. In conclusion, using the
bicycle
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 as a mean of transportation is surely a successful solution when it is combined and applied with other methods.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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