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if a product is sold and people but it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. do you agree or disagree with this

#product #people #entertainment
Nowadays, it is often argued that advertising an object that already have a high rate of sale is an amusement rather than a necessity. I completely disagree with that opinion where I believe that marketing
s
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 the essential key to have more customers and profit.
Firstly
, it is commonly known that advertising a
product
 in various ways will
increase
 the profit of a company.
In other words
, by posting an ad whether by television commercials or magazine ads, it will surely lead to an
increase
 in the turnover of a business.
For instance
, a loyal shopper
do not need
Suggestion
does not need
 to see the advertisement to know the quality of the
brand
 he is using,
however it
Accept comma addition
however, it
 is very important to advertise the benefits of your
product
 to
increase
 the number of the audience.
Thus
 promoting a good and targeting the
competitors
Suggestion
competitors'
competitor's
 customers is a
necessity even
Accept comma addition
necessity, even
 if the
product
 is already having
profit
Suggestion
the profit
.
Secondly
, advertising is a successful mean to remind the customers about your
brand
 and your
product
. To state it
otherwise
, as new products are entering the market, most customers will gradually
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 interest and loyalty for the
brand
in addition
 to shifting to another
brand
 if not reminded about the good quality of their products. For that reason companies have an enormous annual budget designated for marketing purposes.
Hence
, it is very essential to keep up with the competitors and compete with new marketing and advertising strategies. In conclusion, advertising is the most rewarding method not to only
increase
 the sales
numbers but
Accept comma addition
numbers, but
also
 to preserve the loyal clients.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inform
  • educate
  • brand awareness
  • capture attention
  • competitive market
  • influence consumer behavior
  • purchasing decisions
  • positive association
  • enhance appeal
  • product differentiation
  • innovation
  • customers' awareness
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