Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do agree or disagree with this view?
Whether extreme
sport
should be stopped can span Use synonyms
to become
an international imbroglio, Suggestion
become
thus
it is debatable. Disturbing sports like sky diving, skiing and boxing can be dangerous if Linking Words
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accident
Suggestion
an accident
occur
during the Suggestion
occurs
sport
and Use synonyms
ucan
lead to long term neurological condition and Suggestion
you can
u can
also
increasing mortality. Linking Words
However
, due to his evidence I strongly agree that urgent embargo be placed on the Linking Words
sport
because of its dangerous long term health challenges to the participants.
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Firstly
, I am convinced that extreme Linking Words
sport
be scrapped because of Use synonyms
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
delapitating
effect on the body if Suggestion
Use synonyms
accident
occurs. A good example of Suggestion
an accident
this
can be seen with Turkish professional sky diver Usman Walker, Linking Words
who having
m sky dived for 15 years. Accept comma addition
who, having
As a result
of constant head impact and concussion, he was recently diagnosed with Linking Words
parkisons
disease. a degenerative disorder of the central nervous system characterized by tremor and impaired muscular coordination
Parkinson's
Neurologist
Suggestion
The neurologist
A neurologist
have attributed
the focus to the recurring Suggestion
has attributed
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accident he
had while performing the Accept comma addition
accident, he
sport
. Use synonyms
Hence
, for Linking Words
this
cause dangerous sports should not be encouraged as it Linking Words
lead
to lasting Suggestion
leads
health
disease.
the locus of feelings and intuitions
heart
Secondly
, people who perform extreme sports have presented more often to the emergency when compared to other sports and most times died from it. To put it another way, there has been increased cases of death amongst Linking Words
sport
men and woman who partake in skiing. Use synonyms
This
is due to the fact that trauma that results from them is usually life threatening and will require urgent medical and surgical interventions which in major cases absent. For an instance, since the beginning of skiing in Australia over 15 years ago, just over 234 people have died from Linking Words
Use synonyms
accident
resulting from the Suggestion
accidents
an accident
sport
as oppose to over 20 in all other Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sport
combined within that time frame. Suggestion
sports
As a result
of that Linking Words
people
have contested that the Suggestion
person
sport
be stopped.
Individuals who support the Use synonyms
sport
only do so because they enjoy the horror and near death experience it poses. More so, they do not consider the families and victims who have and will die from it.
In summary, it is clear that dangerous sports can result to disability as well as death amongst Use synonyms
sport
men as Use synonyms
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such it
should be Accept comma addition
such, it
baned
until forbidden by law
banned
burned
band
sport
federations around the world can review it appropriately.Use synonyms
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