In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

According to the statistics, girls and boys
do
engage in
make
different choices about their studies. Females tend to prefer arts
instead
males choose scientific subjects. I think there are many reasons to explain
this
trend, to give an example still in many areas around the world some jobs, like
engineer
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an engineer
the engineer
or scientist are considered
men
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men's
jobs. In my opinion is important understand reasons behind these choices.
This
trend should change if it
not represent
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doesn't represent
the real interest of students. The most significant thing
is encourage
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is encouraging
is encouraged
has encouraged
encourages
boys and girls to study what they really like. Males and females prefer
study
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to study
different things in agreement to the studies. These choices
depends
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depend
on the
future
job. In many
countries there
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countries, there
still is a separation between females and males careers. A girl
choose
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chooses
art because knows that in the
future probably
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future, probably
she will not work because in many countries earning money is the man's task and art not ensure a
certainly
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certain
career. Someone could link these preferences to psychologists
aspects but
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aspects, but
I think
that is
a division made on gender stereotypes that are incorrect and not consider the real personality.
This
trend should be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
.
Is important understand
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Is important to understand
what push girls and boys to certain choices. Is important
ensure
react verbally
answer
to both of gender same possibilities for the
future
. Teachers have to show to students all courses they have. To conclude, boys and girls study different things for many reasons, but, especially in poorer countries, the choice is closely connected with the
future
job. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
tendency
have
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has
to be accurately
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
and if it
not represent
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doesn't represent
true inclinations and desires have to change.
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