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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #refugees #assistance #food
Rich nations should accommodate the large number of refugees and help them out by providing basic
life
 entities like proper food and shelter. I am totally agree with above context as developed countries are abundantly enriched, have
moral duty
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a moral duty
the moral duty
 and in return their
economy
 will
also
 grow. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss
this
 in detail. Advanced countries have abundant resources and financially strong enough to afford all the expenses require to cater refugees who fled their
countries
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country
 because of some unwanted reasons. And
infact
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in fact
, the government budget would not get affected because developed countries have good reserves.
In other words
, they are well established in every sector.
Moreover
, it is a moral duty of industrialized countries to lend helping hand to refugees so that they can
also
 live a healthy
life
 without fear. No doubt, humanity is the
first
 fundamental people should follow and come forward to accept refugees, when they are fully equipped with everything to run a smooth
life
 because refugees already been suffered a lot and condemned their
life
's.
Furthermore
, the financially strong nations can get return reward in the form of hard slog labour because refugees
also
 work for the country and fortunately, the
country
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country's
economy
 will grow at
fast pace
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a fast pace
.
For example
, a recent study by World Trade Organization showed that "In German after the acceptance of
large number
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the large number
a large number
 of Syrian refugees, the
country
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country's
economy
 has grown by 30% from
last
 year. To conclude, it can be said that rich nations should come forward to help
increasing number
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the increasing number
 of refugees because of good financial structure, their moral duty on humanitarian grounds as well as their
economy
 to develop with intake of refugees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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