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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers. fewer people are writing letters. some people think that the traditional skill of writing letter will disappear completely. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I definitely agree with the statement said that in the new era of advanced technology, the role of the written letter will fade away gradually.
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In
this
 essay, I will discuss many arguments surround my opinion.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost, the revolutionized of communication means has a direct impact on the prevalence of writing letters.
people
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People
 now seek for the fast and
rabid
done or occurring in a brief period of time
rapid
 way to contact each other, which perform perfectly by modern gadgets.
for
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For
 instance, it costs minutes to send a message through mobile phones, computers, and tablets no matter wherever you send it, and you will receive the immediate
replay
a statement (either spoken or written) that is made to reply to a question or request or criticism or accusation
reply
.
add
make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
Add
 to it, using modern technological devices in business is indispensable.
for
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For
 example, the
contact
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
 between different sectors and companies is more efficient through emails, which save more time and effort than written letters do.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, the significant content of these emails can be saved permanently
in contrast
 to written ones, which you have
to concern about any
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concern about any
 damage could spoil them.
on
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On
 the other hand, there are people still think that we should pursue writing letters which serve an educational purpose, and make students do more of handwriting practices. I think
this
 view is not acceptable anymore, because we need to catch up with global technological advancement.
to
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To
 sum up, it is very obvious to anyone that writing letters have become useless and it will disappear soon,
therefore
, it should be replaced
by using of
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by using
 today’s advanced technology
such
 as computers and mobile phones.
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