Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy.

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It is popularly believed that "
Money
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answereth all things". It is said by some that
one
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can only be happy in life if
one
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has much
money
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.
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essay will discuss how having a lot of
money
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can make people happy and the other things in life that can make
one
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thrilled.
Money
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can make people glad as it helps to meet all
one
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's needs. Currency is seen as the only acceptable legal tender for buying and selling
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,
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, the reason why
lot
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a lot
of it is needed for
hapiness
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
.
This
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legal tender can be used to buy items, settle bills, pay flight tickets, book hotel rooms and go shopping.
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, recently, a wedding ceremony of a middle income earner family was almost cancelled due to the inability of the couple to pay for the hall.
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cancellation
was
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was, however
however
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averted due to the intervention of
one
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of  the bride's rich
uncle
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uncles
. The wedding
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took place  and
every
all people
everyone
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was happy.
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could only have been possible
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of
money
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. Asides legal tender, another thing that can make people excited is
success
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a success
.
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feeling  gives  you a sense of accomplishment. Being successful at an endeavour after chasing it for so long is a very good feeling and it can make anyone glad.
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, a friend of mine who was a graduate and had been unemployed for about 2
years  recently
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years, recently
received a mail from an employer "Oando waters" to resume work on the 15th of May 2019. He was so happy as he had constantly  been on the search for
job
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a job
the job
for 2 years.
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feeling of success made him thrilled and it was like he had won
jackpot
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the jackpot
. In conclusion, While
money
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is widely regarded as  a source of
hapiness
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
, it should be known that other things like success can
also
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make
one
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feel good,
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, we should ensure that we do not only spend time chasing currency.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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