t is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30 as this is best both for individual and for society.Do you agree or disagree?

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people

get

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got

married their children

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under

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but now a days due to stressful and hectic

life

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, individuals get increased the age of their child marriage

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Some human being argued that human should be encouraged to get married before they are 30

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I think

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is the best for both the individual as well as for society.

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refers to the speaker or writer

fully agree with the statement presented.I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs. The

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and predominant reason for supporting the concept that people get married before they are 30 is understanding.

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if the humans should get married after 20

years

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years, then

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they can more

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to understand each other.

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they can

familier

well known or easily recognized

familiar

familiarize

with the partner's dreams.

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married couples have more

time

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to structure their future if they get married before 30 years.They help the partner to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their dreams

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they together build new dreams regarding their

life

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as well as for their family.

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a survey was conducted in Mumbai and it was noticed that those

person

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people

persons

who entered into marriage

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before 30 years got

more happier

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happier

than those who get married after 30 years. Futhermore

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one more convincing point that cannot be ignored is

pregnancy

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pregnant

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which advocates that every girl should have

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a good time

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to get pregnant before they are 30 because if they get pregnant before 30 years

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their baby born in their younger age and it is beneficial to the health of

the both baby

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both the babies

the both babies

as well as their mother which is helpful to increase the

life

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span among girls.

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they have

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a long time

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to take care of his child.

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a survey was conducted in New Delhi

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those women who give birth to baby before 30 years were

more healthier

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healthier

more healthy

than those women who get pregnant after 30 years.

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conclusion

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I recapitulate that there are innumerable strong arguments supporting that individuals get married before they are 30.

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will helpful to understand their partner and

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helpful to live longer and

healthy

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healthier

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

324 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Fertility
Maternal health
Psychological stability
Social maturity
Economic benefits
Shared responsibilities
Ancestral customs
Cultural imperatives
Personal development
Career establishment
Societal norms
Lifestyle choices
Divorce rates
Life decisions
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