t is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30 as this is best both for individual and for society.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #society

In the past

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people

get

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got

married their children

below

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under

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but now a days due to stressful and hectic

life

, individuals get increased the age of their child marriage

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Some human being argued that human should be encouraged to get married before they are 30

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I think

this

is the best for both the individual as well as for society.

Thus

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refers to the speaker or writer

fully agree with the statement presented.I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs. The

first

and predominant reason for supporting the concept that people get married before they are 30 is understanding.

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if the humans should get married after 20

years

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years, then

then

they can more

time

to understand each other.

Also

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they can

familier

well known or easily recognized

familiar

familiarize

with the partner's dreams.

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married couples have more

time

to structure their future if they get married before 30 years.They help the partner to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their dreams

also

they together build new dreams regarding their

life

as well as for their family.

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a survey was conducted in Mumbai and it was noticed that those

person

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people

persons

who entered into marriage

life

before 30 years got

more happier

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happier

than those who get married after 30 years. Futhermore

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one more convincing point that cannot be ignored is

pregnancy

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pregnant

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which advocates that every girl should have

good

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a good time

time

to get pregnant before they are 30 because if they get pregnant before 30 years

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then

their baby born in their younger age and it is beneficial to the health of

the both baby

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both the babies

the both babies

as well as their mother which is helpful to increase the

life

span among girls.

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they have

long

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a long time

time

to take care of his child.

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a survey was conducted in New Delhi

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those women who give birth to baby before 30 years were

more healthier

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healthier

more healthy

than those women who get pregnant after 30 years.

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conclusion

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I recapitulate that there are innumerable strong arguments supporting that individuals get married before they are 30.

This

will helpful to understand their partner and

also

helpful to live longer and

healthy

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healthier

life

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