In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?

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All over the globe, the

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of older people is increasing due to the advancement in medical science and low workplace accidents. In my opinion,

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development has increased life expectancy, it will result in more negative impacts on society.

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essay will back my opinion while looking at both the pros and cons of

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trend. One of the major advantages of

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trend is that it will increase the

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of experienced professionals. Since experienced people

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have proven

to be more efficient as compared to their inexperienced counterparts,

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trend will result in the better workplace practices

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more revenue will be generated.

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, mostly human resource agents want at least two years of job experience in relevant field because it will help

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companies

to utilize their valuable experience.

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, there are some serious drawbacks regarding to

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be considered.

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over population

too much population

overpopulation

is the biggest concern nowadays due to the severity of

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problem.

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the earth

can accommodate

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only certain numbers

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of inhabitants.

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, researchers think that if the population growth remain

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constant, then

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there will be no place for future generations.

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, older people require more medical care which is causing extra funds to be invested in medical budget. To illustrate, according to a recent survey, Pakistan

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spending over 60 percent of its budget on healthcare departments and the demand will surely increase as

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a result

of rise in older

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peoples'

numbers in the future. In conclusion, it is true that the increase in the

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of older people will cause a rise in the proportion of experienced

professionals but

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professionals, but

problems like over population and

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economic

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accompany it.

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, governments should focus more on

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younger

generation rather than investing a huge amount

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older people because

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the former

will be responsible for carrying country in the future.

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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?

Your opinion

Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give own your opinion

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Last month you had an overseas hoiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends.

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter describe the problem; explain how it affects you; say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.