Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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People believe that spending money on

arts

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the arts

is useless and not essential,

instead

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they appreciate if the

govenment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

spent

this

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money

Suggestion

the

society on more

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society on a more

beneficial things. I am writing

this

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essay to mention the reasons why spending dollars on

arts

Suggestion

the arts

is good for our community.

Initially

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arts

Suggestion

the arts

is considered

Suggestion

are considered

as a part of education. Each piece of art has a

tragedic

an event resulting in great loss and misfortune

tragedy

history

Use synonyms

In other words

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histroical

of or relating to the study of history

historical

paintings,

for example

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, describe an event, or represents a historical place. Without those paintings,

historicans

a person who is an authority on history and who studies it and writes about it

historians

may could not now the plot of many events or wars that happened

long time

Suggestion

a long time

ago.

On the other hand

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, many sculptures represent known

philosphers

a specialist in philosophy

philosophers

, scientists, and even strong rulers who died long ago and shared in the development we are in today.

Second

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, without these arts that the government bought, we would not have the

history

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we learned and that will be passed to our kids. As well as, many theories will not be known.

Such

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as, the atomic theory, how our bodies work, and

also

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what natural

treartments

care provided to improve a situation (especially medical procedures or applications that are intended to relieve illness or injury)

treatments

treatment

we can use when we get ill. But, why people prefer spending money on the society

instead

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arts

Suggestion

the arts

? Many countries do not have a good

acommondations

making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances

accommodation

, government do not see

this

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, they concentrate on things and forget about others.

Also

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, many people suffer from serious diseases, some cannot afford the expenses to treat themselves or one of his/her family members, the authorities should take care of those people and help them. At the end,

history

Use synonyms

is very important in many ways, and we should care to learn it. But, as well as the importance of

history

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also

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being good and loyal to their society is the government's

responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

, so they should know how people are living and ask for their needs.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

295 words

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enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
needs of the majority

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