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The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

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The employees are the vital part of any organisation.
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 is true that the growth / success of a company depends upon its the hard
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 of its workers.
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, several measures should be implemented to increase the productivity of the employees.
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 with, the workplace and the working condition should be appropriate. The company should provide a safe and conducive
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 environment with adequate facilities, proper lighting, hygienic washrooms and canteens. A better environment prevents the mind from getting distracted.
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, the
staff
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 can focus on their
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 and deliver better results.
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, it is very important for a worker to be happy and satisfied because only a happy
person can
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person, can
 devote himself physically and mentally towards his
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. Companies should provide the assurance that the life of their
staff
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 is invaluable.
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, the organisation needs to offer a helping hand by providing financial support and insurance.
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, health benefits should be provided to an employee and their family members.
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 will promote the feeling of safety and security.
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, the
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 appraisal system plays an important role in encouraging the
staff
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. An efficient and
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hard working
 employee should be rewarded in front of others.
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 will encourage other
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 members to give their best to prove themselves.
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, in many Indian hospitals, dedicated nurses are given the title of ‘best nurse’ on nursing day.
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,
this
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 will enhance the quality of care provided by nurses.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
 is evident that, the reward system motivates the
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 to give their best. In conclusion, it is the sweat and blood of an employee which take companies to heights.
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, the
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 productivity should be increased by keeping the workers happy and motivated by appreciating their
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 and rewarding them with raises and promotions.
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