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Some People think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however , believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

#people #boys #girls #school #benefit #schools
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Decades old debate on whether the co-educational schools are better or not when compared to the All boys or All girls
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school
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schools
 is still prevalent in todays era.
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 Mixed
Gender
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 schools develop
an
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a
 non
discriminational
unfair treatment of a person or group on the basis of prejudice
discrimination
 personality earlier in a child
,
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,
 Some parents still prefer the Same
gender
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school
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 for their children.
This
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 essay will discuss why Co-educational schools still hold an edge over the Same
gender
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 schools. Mixed
gender
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 schools help the child grow along with
opposite
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the opposite sex
sex
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 and help them remove awkwardness when they
finally
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 enter the real world
,
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,
 to interact with the opposite
sex
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 at work place or daily life routine. They interact with the opposite
sex
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 with a balanced
personality neither
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personality, neither
 showing aggressiveness nor submissiveness. A recent survey by
linkedin
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Linkedin
 showed that most of the men had emotional issues dealing with their
females
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female
 bosses and they all had one thing in common - upbringing in an all boys
school
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. For these reasons, Co-educational schools seem to be
better choice
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a better choice
the better choice
,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 at an age where child grooming is a natural process for his or her personality development. Same
gender
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 schools certainly help children with
better bonding
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a better bonding
 with their schoolmates
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however it
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however, it
also
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 keeps their
mind inquisitive
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mind, inquisitive
 and interested in the other
sex
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,
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,
 mostly for
wrong reasons
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the wrong reasons
.
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 has been scientifically proven in
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the case
 of
teenagers especially
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teenagers, especially
 at their
pubity
the time of life when sex glands become functional
puberty
 stage. The Duke university reported that most of their university students felt extremely uncomfortable when they were
alloted
exultantly proud and joyful; in high spirits
elated
alerted
 hostel rooms to share with an opposite
sex
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 student and
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 the
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 had to build another hostel complex for
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prferences
a strong liking
preferences
preference
.
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 is when parents realize that it they should have opted for
an
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a
 mixed
school
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 for their children. In conclusion, Mixed
school
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 prepare children right from their early grooming days into teenage to make them better adults in the real world where they actually have no choice but to face and deal with opposite
gender
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 in a non discriminatory
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