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These days many of us throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged things and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. what are the effects of this change in attitude?

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There has been a drastic
shift
 in people’s
attitude
 towards repairing the non-functional items. In the past, the earlier
generation
 used to repair the items, whenever
possible but
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possible, but
current
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the current generation
generation
dispose
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disposes
 of items very quickly, even if they can be repaired quickly.
This
 essay will discuss the reasoning behind
this
shift
 in people’s
attitude
 and would
also
 try to provide the effects of
this
. The current
generation
Suggestion
generation's
attitude
 towards savings have changed drastically, that resulted in them having a lot of disposable income at hand.
This
 results in the tactical
shift
 in their spending habits and they believe it is easier to replace than fix the items.
Moreover
, the easy accessibility of the replacement items at a much more economical price point
also
 has resulted in the
attitude
shift
. There has been an uptick on availability of similar product lines at various price ranges, that allows consumers with much
more broader
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broader
choices
Suggestion
choice
 at a much lower price point due to increased competition. Most of the products which get disposed are not easily recyclable, resulting in a huge negative impact on the overall environment. Another possible effect could be related to the social impact that we are seeing, where due to the increased spending habits on
replaced
Suggestion
replacing
 good, the individual skills have gone down rapidly. In Conclusion today it is preferred to buy new items
instead
 of repairing the current item. The reasoning behind
this
shift
 could be due to the easy availability of replacement goods and an
attitude
 change in terms of future savings.
This
 resulted in environmental degradation and a less skilled current
generation
.
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