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Currently, deforestation is one of major concerns for global warming. For instance, an urban area without trees and plants surrounding will be impacted by pollution and hazardous chemical. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world today witnesses many
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 of global warming.
For example
, an urban area with no trees and plants is significantly influenced by pollution and dangerous chemical factors. In
this
 essay, I totally support that deforestation is one of the main causes of global warming, which results in serious results.
To begin
 with, deforestation contributes to more pollution in urban regions,
then
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than
 negatively impacts on
people
Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
 health by many diseases
such
 as cancer, pneumonia, and so on. Trees play an important role in providing oxygen and absorbing carbon dioxide so that people could enjoy
fresh air
Suggestion
the fresh air
. When human try to cut down trees, it means they are shortening their life and destroying the environment.
In addition
,
forest
Suggestion
the forest
 is home to various kinds of fauna and flora.
Although
 these species are now in danger of losing habitats or even extinction, industrial companies seem to ignore and apathetically focus on making profit from wood.
Furthermore
, the loss of trees and plants
also
 leads to catastrophic disasters
such
 as soil erosion or flash floods. Each year we have to observe a lot of houses swept away, a large number of people lose their properties, families and nothing can be done to make up for those
destructions
mental turmoil
distractions
. In conclusion, in my view, deforestation is always a debatable issue which needs solving as soon as possible. Governments as well as citizens should be aware of the necessity of the forest and give hand to make more effort to restrict
this
 situation. There
also
 should be written into laws to forbid
forest illegal
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forest, illegal
 invasions so that more
colors
unit of heat defined as the quantity of heat required to raise the temperature of 1 gram of water by 1 degree centigrade at atmospheric pressure
calories
 would be added to the earth life.
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