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It is common practice for some students to take a gap year between high school and university in order to do charitable work abroad in under developed countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people of doing volunteer work?

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Working for a charity that helps people in need is considered as a noble and selfless act. Nowadays, it is a common practice among young individuals to take a break between secondary and tertiary education to get involved in some voluntary
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 in developing countries. Though
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 phenomenon has numerous benefits, it
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 comes with a few drawbacks. In
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 recent trend.
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, going abroad and doing things other than studying gives the students an opportunity to break free from their usual workload and stress and
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 helps them to relax. It is a great opportunity to gather
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experience
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 that will definitely be helpful in later
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.
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,
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 of working with the underprivileged helps them see the picture of the world outside of their own comfortable
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Also they
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Also, they
 get to face real world challenges which help them develop empathy and become mature and responsible adults.
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 to that, the positive
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 of working for people in need and making a positive change in their
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 boosts their confidence. All of these factors help them become a better and
successful person
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a successful person
successful people
 in
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the future
.
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, my friend volunteered to
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 in a blood donation camp five years ago and that made her make a very important decision of her
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. She just got registered as a doctor
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 year. Regarding the disadvantages, the
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 challenge that these adolescents face after coming back from the break is to adjust
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 the old routine and to concentrate on studies. The new
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 usually affects their mind and changes their outlook towards
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 which in turn makes it harder for them to follow the regular
university
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 schedule or pursue higher studies.
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, a survey done by the
university
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 of Pompeu Fabre in Spain shows that 10% of the students who took
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a one year break
 after high school never joined
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university
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the university
. The rate is even higher among the students who took a longer break. To mitigate
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 problem the
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 has appointed a special
counselor
someone who gives advice about problems
counsellor
 for these kids. In conclusion, we can say that
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 the practice of taking a temporary break and getting involved in
charitable
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charity
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 has a few demerits,
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, it does have a positive impact on a person’s
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 and
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 we should encourage
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.
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