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Rich countries are getting richer while poor countries are getting poorer. What is the cause of this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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The gap between rich and poor countries is widening these days. Due to good governance and low levels of
corruption
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 in
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 world countries they are achieving high
growth
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 when compared to
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 world countries.
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, poor countries can catch up with them by implementing strict laws and reforms.
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 with, rich countries have significantly higher
growth
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 rates because of zero tolerance towards
corruption
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. They value talent and make sure that talented people have no dearth of opportunities in their country.
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 allows them to attract huge investments and
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 create new employment opportunities.
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, rich nations enforce laws which
favor
promote over another
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 companies
to expand
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expand
 their presence.
Companies in
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Companies, in
turn pay
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turn, pay
 taxes to these nations and help them grow financially. For these reasons,
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 world countries can maintain a very healthy
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 rate. Poor countries need to follow similar
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 models and focus on improving their economy.
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, they need to implement tax reforms so that multi-national companies do not face any hassles when expanding their base in these countries.
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,
corruption
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 by officials is very high in these countries and it has a direct impact on people’s lives. Often times, skilled people do not have enough opportunities in these nations and
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 forces them to migrate to other countries. Strict anti-
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 laws need to be implemented to ensure proper governance.
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, the government should proactively create opportunities to prevent brain drain. To conclude, the economic disparity between countries is growing. In my opinion, high levels of
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 and poor governance are the main causes of poverty in poor countries.
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,
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 can be overcome by implementing proper laws and regulations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • technological assistance
  • economic gap
  • basic needs
  • healthcare
  • education
  • infrastructure
  • global stability
  • diplomatic relations
  • global cooperation
  • dependency
  • self-sufficiency
  • strings attached
  • political decisions
  • economic decisions
  • sovereignty
  • tension
  • mismanagement
  • corruption
  • intended purpose
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