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Some people believe that they should able to keep all the money they earn and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extant you agree/ disagree

#people #money #tax
Taxation is
one
 of the fundamental
thing
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things
 for a citizen of any
country
. There are people who have wealth above the minimum amount given by the government are liable to pay tax for
development
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the development
 of
country
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the country
a country
. As per
stated
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state
 notion certain group of people who believe that paying taxes should not impose.
However
, I strongly denounce the said statement. Paying taxes is
one
 of the most important and quite useful thing to build any nation.
First
, the revenue from taxes keeps the nation stable, secure and
happy not
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happy, not
 only
this
, it helps to run a
country
 in smooth way.
Although
, in some countries, it is mandatory for everyone, the rich people
pays
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pay
 off the most of direct taxes. Another advantage of duty is that the most of the politicians and the government employees get their salaries paid off by
taxes which
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taxes, which
 is
pays
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paid
 by normal people,
thus
, they could not afford to do any corruption in their work to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs.
Next
, excise
also
 helps to make any
country
 stronger, popular and reduce inflation.
For instance
, let us take an example of Canada, where people consider paying toll is
one
 basic principle of their life and they are following it religiously. According to the
fobbs
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fobs
 magazine (2018)
,
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,
Canada
,
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,
is a
one
 of the most popular and stronger
country
, where inflation has hardly any effect.
In contrast
, it is argued that the there should be no duty and people have right to keep their money.
However
, I would like to nullify
this
 statement by saying that taxation actually helps to every individual to be a good citizen of a state. To conclude, there are plenty of benefits
in
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of
 paying taxes and everyone should participate in
this
 process,
thus
, I disagree with the said statement and I don't share my consent with it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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