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Friends can you please check my essay. Topic is - Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a subject of debate, that the
usage
Suggestion
use
 of
technology
 will fix many environmental problems like pollution, global warming etc.
or
introduces an alternative
Or
 not, which is being faced my human beings.
Environment
Suggestion
Environmental
 problems can be resolved completely by
technology
 or not, is a matter of research for scientists, but selective technical methodology usages will definitely help to reduce the
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 concerns. Today when the whole world is being challenged by global warming, recycling the
industry chemical
Accept comma addition
industry, chemical
 waste by using
electric machine
Suggestion
an electric machine
 will be a relief for human beings. Use of
technology
 can help to reduce the high volume of fog, by installing the good quality of electric gadgets into various factories and plants, which is constantly polluting the
environment
. By deploying the sewage treatment plant at various residential
society
Suggestion
societies
 will reprocess the human waste and recycle the water for their own re-
use
Suggestion
usable
 inside toilets. By using social media, various NGO's can appeal for plantation, to reduce the
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 problems,
however excessive
Accept comma addition
however, excessive
 usage of the
technology
 is the main reason for
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 problems. On the other side of the coin,
technology
 is the prime reason for pollution and the scientists predicted that, there is a
whole
an opening into or through something
hole
 in
ozone layer
Suggestion
the ozone layer
 of the earth. If we will not stop the excessive usage of
technology
 like car, truck and coal train engines, it will continue to pollute our
environment
. At the end, it is suggested that
balanced use
Suggestion
the balanced use
 of
technology
 will be a win-win situation for humans. I appeal everyone to adopt
this
 in daily use.
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