These days many children spend a great deal of time sitting in from of a television. Some people believe that parents should strictly limit the time that children spend watching TV as it is harmful to their development. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
modernt world
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the modern world
modern world
, it can be seen that kids watch
TV
a considerable
time
a day. Regarding
this
, there is an opinion among some that his mother & father is responsible for controlling his
kid
on
television
time
.
This
is highly agreeable as addicting to the
television
programs could affect on the future of little ones
regatively
in a relative manner; by comparison to something else
relatively
. One, and the most
abvious
easily perceived by the senses or grasped by the mind
obvious
reason why the said opinion is true is that children tend to move away from their studies with
TV
time
. Some kids have made their habit
to
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of
sitting in front
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
the
tV
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TV
tv
right after coming from schools. Some even take their meals in front of it.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
will not have
adiquate
having the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
adequate
time
to spend on homework of the day. That could lead to an extreme fall in their education in
alder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
elder
ages.
In addition
to that, it has been proven that
television
sets emit harmful rays from the screen. Exposing to those rays would lead to
damage retina
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the damage retina
of
eyes
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the eyes
, according to studies. It is commonly seen that youngsters watch
TV
as their eyes glued to the screen, not being at a safe distance from the
TV
set. Parents should observe and take it seriously so that the
life-like
evoking lifelike images within the mind
lifelike
lifeline
eyes of their
kid
could be
proteted
kept safe or defended from danger or injury or loss
protected
.
On the other hand
, some
television
programs are education programs which give an extra support on children's subjects.
However
, since those programs are telecasted rarely, it cannot be given a considerable value. If
such
a program must be watched, parents should be keen on letting the
kid
to watch
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watch
those programs only.
For example
, if the teacher had instructed to watch an environmental
documentry
a film or TV program presenting the facts about a person or event
documentary
, the parent should get informed and let the child watch. Even the parent could sit with him and explain it to the child. In conclusion, the
television
could lead to a harm than a
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
to the progress of a child. Though there are some
valueable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
programs on
TV
, parents should control the
kid
watching if properly, only for a strictly limited
time
.
Therefore
, the opinion said is heavily agreeable.
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