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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that governments should take steps for the improvement of
railway
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the railway system
railway systems
a railway system
system
. While some people think that
instead
 of the development of
railway
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the railway system
a railway system
railway systems
system
, public
transport
 should be made better for the public. In my opinion, development of
railway
system
 has numerous benefits for the people like time saving and safety, because in the trains people can reach on their destinations in a short time and there are less chances of accidents to occur during the travelling in trains. On the one hand, money should be spent by the government to improve the conditions of
railway
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the railway system
railway systems
a railway system
system
. During the journey in the trains, there is no problem of traffic jam, so people are able to complete their journey earlier in the trains.
In addition
, every train has its own
railway
 path, so the chances of accidents in
railway
system
 are minimum as compare to in public
transport
 on roads.
For example
, in Japan,
majority
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the majority
 of the people prefer to travel in fast trains for their safety. I agree that people can save their time by travelling in trains and trains are
the safe
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the safest
 mode for passengers for travelling.
On the other hand
, it is the major responsibility of government to develop public
transport
system
. Due to the facility of public
transport
, people can go to the every part of
country
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the country
 which is not possible in
railway
system
 due to the limited routes of
trains
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the trains
.
Moreover
, tickets
of
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on
 public buses are cheaper than trains in many countries. For the instance, in Pakistan, poor people prefer to use public
transport
 to travel from one place to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 place because they cannot afford the expensive tickets of trains.
However
, I think that in public
transport
, people often reach late to their places due to traffic jam and people are injured
by
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in
 road accidents. In conclusion,
although
 the public
transport
system
 provides the citizens variety of routes and lower cost of
tickets but
Accept comma addition
tickets, but
, I think, trains are quicker and safer for the public than public
transport
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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