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For some people, consumer goods have become the most important thing in life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Consumer
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 goods are taking a significant place in
lives
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the lives
 of some people. In my opinion their benefits are more than drawbacks. Due to highly advantageous and accessible these
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produce
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products
are taking
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is taking
 a special place in
customer’s
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the customer’s life
a customer’s life
life
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. Admittedly, there are some minor disadvantages of
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 development of
consumer
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 goods in
user’s
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the user’s life
life
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. People become addicted to these
consumer
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 goods
.
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.
 They become over dependent on these
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produce
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products
productions
.
Ultimately
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Ultimately, this
this
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 dependency makes their
life
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 vulnerable if any of these product is unavailable to them.
For instance
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, mobile phones are making people so dependent that without
them it’s
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them, it’s
 hard to imagine
life
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 now-a-days.
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 to
this
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, rather than considering these
produce
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 as a thing of comfort people made them a status symbol and to obtain it they are ready to own it by credit. Despite all these, if considering the positive side these products are very much beneficial in
routine
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the routine life
life
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 of almost every
consumer
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 providing them a lot of comforts. Starting from our morning routine
to day
the present time or age
today
 end, We utilize
lot
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lots
 of
consumer
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produce
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.
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 – electronic products etc.
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, it is widely available in every part of the country. Even in remote areas a range of
consumer
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 products can be seen.
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 to, new advancement in manufacturing techniques
make
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makes
 it available at an affordable price to various customers. These products cater to various needs of customers and available in
plethora
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a plethora
 of varieties. Where one can choose according to their budget and suitability rather than a thing of showing status. To conclude,
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 the addiction and show off associated with
usage
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the use
use
 of these
produce
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 is not good for any
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consumer but
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consumer, but
 their benefits and comforts in our daily
life
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 makes them an inevitable part of our
life
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. In fact, the addiction problem can be resolved by exercising self-control by the users.
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