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THE CULTURE AND TRADITION ARE CHANGING FROM GENERATION TO GENERATION. WHY IS IT HAPPENING, WHAT CAN BE DONE TO CHANGE IT .

#culture #tradition #generation #change
Culture
 is the precious treasure of the ancestor’s traditions, which is being getting lost by the influence of new
culture
 and
tradition
 among new
generation
.
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 Various solutions can
stepup
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step up
 to resolve the impending situation.
To begin
 with, Cultural and traditional values are the souvenir by the patriarch, which
is gradually lose
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is gradually losing
has gradually lost
gradually loses
 its shine with the ripple effect of modern family values in the society. As in the modern era, family sizes has been decreasing
,
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,
 called as nuclear families.
which
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Which
 includes parents and their offsprings, there is no role of grandparents who can teach their grand
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
 about the moral cultural values and old traditions
.
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For instance
, a survey was conducted in 2018, to study the knowledge about
culture
 and
tradition
 among teenagers which revealed that only two percent of the population was familiar about their
culture
 and
tradition
 because their grandparents tell them forefather stories regularly in the joint family settings
.
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.
Hence
,
new
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a new generation
the new generation
generation
 is virgin without knowing their cultural and traditional norms.
Moreover
,
culture
 and
tradition
 is being greatly affected by globalisation
,
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,
 as a
consequences it
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consequence, it
consequence it
 has
change
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changed
 the lifestyle of the human anthology including dietary and clothing pattern which is the biggest issue of having health problems like overweight and underweight like problems. To illustrate, traditional meals
is being replaced
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are being replaced
 by junk food causes obesity and traditional dresses is replaced by chick outfits generates the psychiatric disorder like anorexia nervosa. Allegedly globalisation
surpass
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surpasses
 the traditional and cultural values
.
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 In conclusion,
culture
 and
tradition
 can preserve if,
parents protect
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parents, protect
 their children’s from deleterious effects of globalisation and periodically make them aware about solemnised
culture
 and traditions so that they can rife their traditional values from
generation
 to
generation
.
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