More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Pupil now a days are so eager towards snacks more than healthy foods.In many nation lot of young students are being fatty which

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impacts

is impacting

on rich countries.

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effects

the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion

affects

the countries in

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a lot

lots

of ways

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this

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complete essay will discuss the effects and cause of

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problem. One reason behind

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of them or themselves

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children overload is lack of parenting towards food quality.In the present World people are so busy that they feed

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of them or themselves

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own children fast food which are mainly pizza

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burger

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result it

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result, it

mainly affect the agriculture part of the nation

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for the reason that; on account of

because

of less demand

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USA 80 percent

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the USA 80 percent

of the people work

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the second day of the week; the first working day

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the sixth day of the week; the fifth working day

Friday

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a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)

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of people

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children and allow them to eat outside.If guarding

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cares

there children in a proper

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way, they

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nationn

a politically organized body of people under a single government

nation

nations

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as well

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due to heavy body more adolescent are getting sick. The reason behind

there

of them or themselves

their

sickness is there

imunity

the state of not being susceptible

immunity

power degrades when they become more bulky

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effects

have an effect upon

affects

there

of them or themselves

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metabolism and lower

there

of them or themselves

their

endurance

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problem make them tire so easily

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India is the

second

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largest populated country

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Every year 11000 pupil

die

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dies

due to increase in

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fat content

which led to a cancer

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overweighted

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

children get sick like

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country might have to build extra hospitals only for fat infants. In conclusion

eatin

the act of consuming food

eating

eaten

food is allowable

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but when it goes uncontrollable it bothers

there

of them or themselves

their

heath which probably make them

more heavier

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heavier

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Mainly it can be controlled through proper guidance

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If care is given

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appropriate level they can be saved from unwanted sickness which normally happens to fatigue people

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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"writing_prompt":"Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?",

. In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?