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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

#people #prisoners #community #work #bars
According to a criminal law a
crime
 divided light, medium, heavy and particularly grave
crime
 and for the not heavy
crime
 as a punishment an imprisonment is substituted to a gratuitous social work. In my
opinion every
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opinion, every
crime
 must be punished. But I
am agree
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agree
 with that approach that a definite
prisoners
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prisoner
 should be do free public
job particularly
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job, particularly
 who has committed the light
crime
, as the statistics showed when the criminal person who has done the not heavy
crime
 being in the same place with the perpetrator who has made the
repetitive particularly
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repetitive, particularly
 grave
crime
, he or she can not straighten in that environment, because in that circumference they will study else more bad deed.
Therefore
,
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,
 personally I think that Government granting and giving an opportunity the mentioned above people
to
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for
 doing unpaid community work it is a great chance for the criminals to bring them back to their normal life.
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