Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

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According to a criminal law a

crime

divided light, medium, heavy and particularly grave

crime

and for the not heavy

crime

as a punishment an imprisonment is substituted to a gratuitous social work. In my

opinion every

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opinion, every

crime

must be punished. But I

am agree

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agree

with that approach that a definite

prisoners

Suggestion

prisoner

should be do free public

job particularly

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job, particularly

who has committed the light

crime

, as the statistics showed when the criminal person who has done the not heavy

crime

being in the same place with the perpetrator who has made the

repetitive particularly

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repetitive, particularly

grave

crime

, he or she can not straighten in that environment, because in that circumference they will study else more bad deed.

Therefore

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personally I think that Government granting and giving an opportunity the mentioned above people

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for

doing unpaid community work it is a great chance for the criminals to bring them back to their normal life.

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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

Fully explain your ideas

What young people should study at school has long been the subject of intense debate and this is a question that certainly does not have one correct answer.

Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?