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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #access #information
Internet
 plays a significant role in
modern era
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the modern era
. To get an access to any
information
,
internet
 has become
cheap and dependable source
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a cheap and dependable source
 in many ways. Some people would argue that it is not right to use
internet
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the internet
 to acquire
information
 while others would suggest to avail
this
 service in order to access any
information
. In my opinion, it is
good thing
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a good thing
 to some
extent but
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extent, but
 at
same time
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the same time
, it can be misleading.
Firstly
, Using
internet
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the internet
 as source of
information
 can greatly benefit people in various ways. One of the benefits would definitely be less time
consumption
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consuming
 while looking for
information
 on
internet
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the internet
.
For example
, if someone needs to find a meaning of a word, it is less time taking to find the meaning on google
inspite
 of hunting it in
dictionary
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the dictionary
a dictionary
.
Secondly
,
internet
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the internet
 can provide different aspects of
same
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the same information
information
 which means that one can have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to compare different opinions for
same topic
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the same topic
.
For instance
, if one reads a book on
particular topic
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a particular topic
, it would be read from
author's perspective
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an author's perspective
the author's perspective
 only;
however
, different
viewpoins
any instrument or instrumentality used in fighting or hunting
weapons
 can be found using websites for the same.
Therefore
, it helps the reader to make
right decision
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the right decision
a right decision
.
On the contrary
,
internet
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the internet
 can have
quite negative impact
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a quite negative impact
 on people for being a source of
information
. Sometimes,
information
 given on
internet
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the internet
 can be misled or misunderstood. To illustrate it
further
, when people look for
information
 to cure different diseases, they start eating unprescribed medicines or perform remedies without consultation with
doctor
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a doctor
the doctor
 which results in serious health issues.
Hence
, it can be hazardous to have vast access to
information
. To conclude,
internet
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the internet
 provides many valuable pieces of
information
 which
is
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are
 always
benefecial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for users but
also
, if not used in
conscious manner
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a conscious manner
, it could be proved lethal.
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