The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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more have
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common
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and it'
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their perseverance towards their goal. They set an aim and walk towards it despite the hardship. But in current
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, people tend to evolve. They
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more than
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career
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to reach their goal in order to succeed without any doubts. It is
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assured by their
masters
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degree. Reasons for choosing more than
one
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career
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are: • To manage the competition • To lift the family's burden • To realize their dream It is smart to pursue more than
one
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career
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as the world becomes competitive. It made even the inborn talents difficult to set their feet. As the number of graduates
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gradually,
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employment decreases. In order to overcome
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difficulty, it is wiser to opt for
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higher studies and be a unique
one
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in a crowd of undergraduates. Most
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the
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people prefer IT
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even though they are from other departments. Because of their family situation, they have no other options. After their family status is improved, they
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on to their core companies to be what they
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to be.
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some of them choose more than
one
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career
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to realize their dream.
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well known
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example is MS Dhoni who
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ticket
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collector
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railway
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station at first and now he is the best captain of all time in
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world.
One
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should take
risk
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to realize their dream by picking out more than
one
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career
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. They should be calculative when to take
risk
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so that their desire comes true. In
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world of many opportunities,
one
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should grab
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one
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to reach their goal.
This
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essay discussed
about
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the way of new fashion by picking out more than
one
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career
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. In my opinion, it is not bad to have more chances. So I concur with the statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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