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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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It is true that modern families
do not have
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did not have
 meals together as often as in the past. Reasons for
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 vary, and there are several impacts on both households and the community as a whole. Family members today rarely eat meals together because of several causes. The hectic
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 schedule is often considered the main reason why individuals now tend to resort to prepared meals to save time for
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. As
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, the tradition that parents came back from
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 to cook lunch for children is no longer preferable in many
countries including
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countries, including
 Vietnam, and
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 explains why the fast food industry is developing fast in
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 country. Another contributing factor is that culinary skills
are no longer passed
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no longer pass
 on to younger generations. Food outlets and restaurants today offer a wide range of food choices that can satisfy even fussy eaters, meaning that cooking is not necessarily a skill that young people need to learn to cook for the family. The gradual disappearance of family meals has several effects.
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, having meals with family members is a great chance for them to bond with each other, so parents have less time to talk with their children, and spouses
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 lose an opportunity to share daily stories. On the social level, some traditions may be lost
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 of people eating out too often. Family values might not be appreciated when people do not feel the need to come back home after
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 for a meal. On special occasions
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 as Tet (the New Year holiday in Vietnam), family feasts serve as an important event, and it is regretful that
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 tradition is gradually disappearing. In conclusion, the disappearance of family meals is attributable to various factors.
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 has several damaging effects on both families and societies
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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