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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are reasons? Solution to change negative attitudes?

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Nowadays, global
tourism
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 is becoming increasingly popular. Some argue that worldwide
tourism
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 has negative effects on the host nations. In
this
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 essay, I will look at the main causes of the problem in
terns
status with respect to the relations between people or groups
terms
 of environmental problems and public order and propose some solutions from governments. One of the
first
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 problems of global
tourirm
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
 is that there is a considerable growth in the number of environmental issues.
This
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 means that international
tourism
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make
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makes
great
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greater
 proportion of foreign visitors rise,
this
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 may lead to the rapid increase of garbages from tourist services, particularly
unrecycle
a vehicle with a single wheel that is driven by pedals
unicycle
 rubbish
such
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 as nylon packings or plastic
botters
group of guns or missile launchers operated together at one place
batteries
,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 resulting in polluted environment growth. Another major problem is the uncontrollable public order.
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 is because there are challenges for governments in some nations to know where tourists stay so
policemans
a member of a police force
policemen
fint
come upon, as if by accident; meet with
find
 it difficult to protect foreign visitors from violence or pillager issues,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
, by contrary, when those visitors break the law, the government might not know where they are to
corest
touch or stroke lightly in a loving or endearing manner
caressed
 them. It is important that action is taken to combat these problems. Government should encourage the tourist service industry
use
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 much recycle product
such
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 as paper straw
in stead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of plastic straw. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
,
government
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the government
 should ban littering in public by using foreign languages in signs. Regarding with public order, governments should invest more budget in installing lots of security
cameraes
equipment for taking photographs (usually consisting of a lightproof box with a lens at one end and light-sensitive film at the other)
cameras
 in some tourist attractions and training professional
policemans
a member of a police force
policemen
policeman
 who can speak foreign languages. All in all, there are lots of serious problems related to the increasing worldwide
tourism
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 development. Action must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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 the situation will get worse.
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