Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

The number of tertiary educational
institution
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institutions
has been steadily increasing over the past decade, with the burgeoning of the
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
under the private wing.
This
has allowed
public
Suggestion
the public
to have easier access to the university regardless of the financial and social background. It seems as if we have achieved the aim of equal academic opportunity for all, ironically it is not. The poor still
suffers
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suffer
and encounters more difficulties to reach to the tertiary level as
compare
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compared
to the rich ones. The biggest limitation to
this
issue is limited resources. Families who only capable to meet daily needs will struggle to send their children to school, not to mention any private funded institution which
are known
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is known
for good performance among its students; which will be totally impossible for the poor.
In addition
, many times, children from
such
background will have a higher tendency to be involved in juvenile activities as no proper guidance neither
from
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of
the busy parents trying to make a living nor the school as many teachers in
such
area are already fixated with the thought of these children being useless students. Thence, the door leading to higher education system has
shuts
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shut
down very much earlier, giving them no option but to become
dropout
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dropouts
a dropout
.
Moreover
, the poor will have to compete fiercely with others from the whole
nation
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nation's
population to be able to enter into
such
system. They must excel academically and get scholarship if they are incapable of paying
the large
Suggestion
the largest
amount of schooling fee. They have to struggle more in order to be able to be recognized as an undergraduate. On the opposite side, the rich will never face any of those problems due to strong financial support. Private tutors are available for teaching if the performance is poor; parents spend more time guiding and encouraging their children to study. Not only that, the rich
counterpart
Accept comma addition
counterpart, also
also
enjoys an influential social background, as many academicians themselves are
also
within the same level. These people enjoy the benefit of
favoritism
an inclination to favor some person or group
favouritism
as many are connected as family friends, which we all known being a hidden rule despite the so-called meritocracy system for entering into institutions. In conclusion, the poor faces many
challenges to reach to
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challenges to reach
the varsity in term of finance, support, and social constraints.
Therefore
, it is not right to say both have the similar problem
to
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with
access to tertiary education.
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