In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with other people (fam- ily, friends, colleagues) are more important than anything else. Issues such as work and wealth take second place. Argue in support of this claim.

The increasing pressures of today’s
money
driven world can often cause people to gravitate toward material items. But personal
happiness
can never be achieved through
such
things as work, success and wealth.
Although
these things may be nice ‘extras’, it is argued that healthy relationships with family, friends and col- leagues are the true secrets to personal
happiness
.
This
will be shown
be
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to be
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Analyz
analysed
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ing
to or toward the inside of
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the often lonely lives of many wealthy celebrities as well as the advice of older people who speak from experience.
Firstly
, the lives of wealthy celebrities often illustrate that
money
cannot buy hap- piness.
For example
, despite being fabulously wealthy, Robbie Williams and Kirsten Dunst suffered from clinical depression they attributed to loneliness. As their experiences show, the link between
money
and true
happiness
appears to not be as strong as the link between loneliness and unhappiness.
Thus
, relationships between people are more important than
money
. The advice from many older people regularly reiterates
this
.
For example
, all four of my grandparents claim family and friends to be the things that brought them the greatest
happiness
in their lives. As these sorts of sentiments are common among the elderly of all countries and cultures, it is clear that as people age things of true importance are clarified.
Thus
, human relationships are much more likely to be pre- cursors to personal
happiness
than
money
or careers. As seen above, wealth cannot buy true
happiness
and
this
is a realization that all too often comes
in
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with
old age. It is true, family, friends and colleagues and the rela- tionships formed with them are the genuine catalysts to lasting
happiness
.
Thus
, the old adage holds true: the more love a person gives, the more they get.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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