Discuss both views and give your opinion. Some believe that punishment is the only purpose of prisons, while others believe that prisons exist for various reasons.

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beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
jails are used to serve
muliple
having or involving or consisting of more than one part or entity or individual
multiple
purposes rather than just to provide punishment. On the one hand, some people
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that prison can be used to provide key skills to the prisoners. These skills can be used once the prisoner comes out of a jail for employment.
Additionally
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, prisons can
also
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help in preparing them ready for the community once they serve their
punsihment
the act of punishing
punishment
.
Moreover
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, one of the study done in India, a lot of prisoners started living normal life after completing their sentence.
On the other hand
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, few believe that prison is mainly used to provide punishment to the criminals because of the following reasons.
Firstly
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, these people
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that these
terreorist
Suggestion
terrorists
terrorist
has caused a huge destruction to the
sociecty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
and
therefore
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should be punished.
Secondly
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, the
perople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
feel safe and sleep peacefully if the culprits are behind the bars.
Thirdly
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, it is the fear of the punishment that restricts other citizen to take
law
Suggestion
the law
in their hands.
For example
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, in countries like UAE, the reasons for low crime rate is the harsh jail term
they provide if the
Suggestion
if they provide the
criminal is convicted. Fourthly, it is important to make convicts
relaize
be fully aware or cognizant of
realize
realise
realizes
that they have
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
a
henious
extremely wicked, deeply criminal
heinous
crime which is not acceptable and will not be
tolertated
put up with something or somebody unpleasant
tolerated
.
Hence
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, once they come out of a jail, they will think twice before
commeting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
commenting
commuting
any other crime. To conclude, I would again reiterate my view that
prsion
Suggestion
people
person
a person
portion
prison
can be
best things
Suggestion
the best things
that can happen to criminals if used properly.
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