Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Computers
are
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were
very popular in those days, people love to
use
computer
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the computer
a computer
computers
for so many different things like learning, entertainment.
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
people think that
computer
are teach
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teaches
in a classroom and children are able to
use
computer
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the computer
computers
a computer
for learning
purpose
.
However
,
other
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others
think that dependence on
computer
may have a certain kind of
risk but
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risk, but
according to my opinion school should provide
computer
for children
to
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with
learning
purpose
.
Firstly
,
dependence
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depending
on
computer
is not a good think because there are many negative
effect
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effects
for
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of
using computers
for example
, children
use
computers for their learning
purpose
, but there are many children who played games in
computer
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the computer
a computer
rather than learning.
Moreover
, using
computer
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a computer
the computer
for
long time
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a long time
also
have
bad effect
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bad effects
a bad effect
on health
for example
, if children
use
computer
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the computer
for longer hours than
it
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its
cause eyesight problem.
Secondly
, computers are increasing rapidly and classroom
allow
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allows
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
to learn computers and done their learning task with the
help
of computers because with the
help
of
this
childrens
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child
children
are able to
use
new technology and
also
find interest in learning
for example
, there are some
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
who are boring, while learning and doing some academic work, but with the
help
of computers they find interest of doing academic work easily. To conclude, it is true that using computers for
long time
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a long time
would effect on
children
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children's
child
health, but according to my opinion classroom should provide computers for learning
purpose
because with the
help
of
this
children
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child
are able to learn how to
use
computers and for those who feel
borning
the act of burning something
burning
while learning are able to find interest in learning.
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