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The two
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
dates
dots
 illustrate the proportion of various types of causes affecting
land
degradation
 in the world. Overall, the most significant reasons is over-grazing in worldwide.
However
, if we separate from different regions, they will not totally be the same. It was indicated that each region had a special majority of
land
degradation
 during the 1990s. In
term
Suggestion
terms
 of the cause of global
land
degradation
, over-grazing is considered as the majority which accounts for 35% comparing to deforestation and
over-cultivation
 with 30% and 28% respectively.
Nevertheless
, regarding to the table, it was a bit different for the major reason of
land
 degraded from each region in the 1990s. In North America, the main reason was
over-cultivation
 which constituted 3.3%, while the less important impacts of
this
 were minimal, with 0.2% and 1.5
% respectively
Accept comma addition
%, respectively
. In Europe, deforestation was estimated to the most serious aspect (9.8%), and the rest of them accounted for 7.7% (
over-cultivation
) and 5.5% (over-grazing). The highest percentage of the impact was over-grazing (11.3%) in Oceania.
In addition
, there was no
over-cultivation
 and a little essential element (deforestation) which provided 1.7%. In conclusion, Europe is classified as the most serious in
land
degradation
 (23%) between other two countries (5% and 13%).
In addition
, there is the highest percentage in two areas of farmland degraded (9.8% and 7.7%)
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