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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience

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Preparing food has been an important part of the daily routine in most cultures. Recently, advances made in information technology, social networking and refrigeration have made it easier and quicker to prepare food.
This
 has led to an improved productivity of people, mostly women, and
also
 provided
access
 to various types of cuisines and their recipe.In
this
 essay, we will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 some of these reasons and their impact on the lives of the people. Recent advancement made in cooking methods like Refrigeration, microwave and oven
has reduced
Suggestion
have reduced
 the cooking time to a
third
 as required before.
This
 provides opportunities to the people working in the kitchen, mostly women, to explore additional careers outside of the home.
Increase
Suggestion
An increase
 in the workforce and productivity has
also
 contributed to the growth of the economies.
For example
, since the feminist movement in the eighties, major economies of the world
has grown
Suggestion
have grown
 by 4% year on year. Refrigeration and cooking recipes on the social media have led to better information sharing
,
Accept space
,
which has provided people with
access
 to different cultures and their cuisines.
This
 has led to more immigration of people and cross cultural interaction.
For example
, Americans now have
access
 to Chinese and Indian foods which are very different from the American food. To conclude,
Although
 there are other reasons for
feminist movement
Suggestion
the feminist movement
, shorter cooking time is definitely one of the reasons which empowered women
to seek
Suggestion
seek
 opportunities beyond the kitchen. Immigration has impacted
lives
Suggestion
the lives
 of the people to a great extent and
access
 to different cuisines is one of the factors which has promoted immigration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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