In some countries, there are many social problems involving teenagers. Some people say this is because parents spend much of their time at work and not at home, do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, it is known that teenagers are frequently involved in social problems. Recently, several educators have claimed that
this
is largely due to the fact that parents spend more and more time at work other than being at home with their children. In my opinion,
although
lack of parental
presense
the state of being present; current existence
presence
presents
prisons
may be harmful to the child, I do not believe it is the sole reason for these social problems. Parental support and
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
is a vital aspect in the
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
of a child,
especialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
teenagers. A recent study from Boston University has shown that teenagers who grew up among parents who worked full time jobs
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
more likely to be involved in violent
encouters
come together
encounters
in
comparisson
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
comparisons
to other teenagers. The study concluded that at least one parent should be present after school in order to guide the child. Despite that, the article failed to include other parameters which may
also
explain why
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
misbehaive
behave badly
misbehave
. In my opinion, aside from lack of parental
presense
the state of being present; current existence
presence
, two main reasons may
also
to explain
Suggestion
explain
why adolescence
have
Suggestion
has
social problems.
First
,
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
are exposed to violent materials substantially more than previous years. Violent discussions heard and seen on
Youtube
Suggestion
YouTube
as well as video games teach our
children
Suggestion
children's
expressions and aggressive
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
they do not normally hear and see at home.
Second
, as they grow up children will constantly try to deny social norms in order to define
themselfs
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. Due to that,
constant presence
Suggestion
the constant presence
of a parent will only lead to
antagonism
Suggestion
antagonistic
and
further
bad interactions. In conclusion, in my opinion children have social problems
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
they are trying to define who they really are. Maternal support, despite its importance, may sometimes lead to the opposite result.
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