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Nowadays, we are living in a throw-away society. What are its causes and what are its problems?

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It is true that the ever increasing waste produced from human activities
is taking
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takes
 a heavy toll on the
environment
. In my opinion, the increasingly high consumption of goods and the
contaminative
make impure
contaminate
 industrial productions are two main factors contributing to
this
 trend. Nowadays, the rate at which daily necessities
such
 as food, clothes and papers are consumed is dramatically rising due to the population boom. With people eating and using more, the amount of rubbish coming from the packaging of various commodities is exceeding the degrading capacity of our
environment
. What makes the situation worse is our tendency to use something once and throw it away. A typical example would be the one-off plastic bags with which consumers convey groceries from
market
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the market
a market
 to their home. The unrestricted use of these has resulted in the prevalence of plastic rubbish that cannot be thoroughly degraded.
Moreover
, the intense industrial activities around the world are introducing more refuse to the
environment
.
For instance
, the poisonous metals
such
 as lead and rotted steels deriving from the mass production of
electrical
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electric
 devices and automobiles contribute largely to
this
 problem.
Additionally
, most manufacturing methods utilised in production lines are not
economic
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economical
 and clean. The poor availability of advanced recycling technology in industries leads to that recyclable materials
such
 as plastic, concrete and ceramic are being randomly dumped all over the world. As it takes considerable long time for these to be digested by bacteria, the trend that industrial wastes are accumulating at an accelerating rate is difficult to stop. In conclusion, a throw-away society is the result of the soaring amount of goods we need every day and the insufficiently regulated industrial activities. If proper measures are not taken promptly,
this
 trend is likely to cause more serious problems to the
environment
 and people’s lives.
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