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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible , while others argue that it has had a very negative impact. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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With the growth of cost-effective
air
 travel, many people think that one of its merits is to allow
overseas journey
Suggestion
the overseas journey
 to become more approachable.
However
, there are a number of arguments that it has some dire consequences.
This
 essay discusses both sides before giving my perspective. On the one hand, cheap
air
 travel provides
gold
benefit
good
 opportunities in the area of business and tourism. It is advantageous and economical for business individuals
to attend
Suggestion
attend
attending
 their meetings or conferences abroad, which contributes to open up international markets and stimulate economic growth.
Furthermore
, there are an enormous number of visitors travelling to the countries applying money-saving
air
 tickets. To illustrate, the period of five years from 2013 to 2018 witnessed a significant increase in the tourist rates in Vietnam with roughly 6% of the total GDP.
On the other hand
, the negative aspect
to
Suggestion
of
this
 development is its detrimental environmental costs.
Airplanes
 use huge amounts of fuel, a non-renewable resource. They
also
 emit high levels of carbon dioxide, which is the main factor causing the global warming and increasing greenhouse effect, endangering all life in the world.
Additionally
, the cost-effective airlines do not have ability to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their customer’s obligations due to the shortages of planes or staffs serviced for the flights resulting in many
air
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 have to cope with the flight cancellation or postponement. To sum up, I believe both sides of the arguments have its own appropriate points.
Nevertheless
, on balance, it seems that it would be beneficial for
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 to be more aware and informed of the true cost of their
air
 travel in relation to the environment and to make their choices
accordingly
.
Submitted by Nguyen Ngoc Anh on

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