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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should, therefore, be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Role
Suggestion
The role
 of computers in contemporary era is considered crucial. Many
notion
Suggestion
notions
 that, computers should be used for teaching purposes.
However
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 argue dependency on
computer
Suggestion
the computer
 is detrimental to students. In my opinion, positive and negative aspects are equal in measure. Enhancement in technology has upgraded traditional style of teaching.
Consequently
, producing ease in life of teachers and students by decreasing their workload.
For instance
, in past teachers used to write on blackboard with chalk while standing for hours leading to consumption of energy.
In addition
, wastage of precious time is
also
 encountered as
student
Suggestion
a student
the student
 has to copy lengthy lectures written on blackboard. With the help of computers now students can save time by getting lectures in PDF form.
Furthermore
, teachers can reuse these typed lectures as curriculum is rarely superseded.
Hence
, computers must be introduced into classrooms to utilise blessings that technology
begets
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budgets
.
Although
, computers
has produced
Suggestion
have produced
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
 in teaching methods, its negative aspects
on
Suggestion
of
 students cannot be denied. Computers have a hazardous impact on
students
Suggestion
students'
student's
student
 intellectual level. Students are
detered
try to prevent; show opposition to
deterred
 from brainstorming. To
illusturate
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
,
autocorrection
 system in computer
restrain
Suggestion
restrains
 students to remain to remember correct spellings.
This
 has significant negative impact on students leading to dependency on computers. To conclude,
education system
Suggestion
the education system
 has been modernized by widespread use of computers, creating comfort in teaching methods. Harmful impact is equivalent to benefits.
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