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Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that we space programs should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Exploring into the
space
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 had been only a dream for several decades ago,
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however it
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however, it
 has been scaled back already due to the massive investment and less positive outcomes.
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, while some people feel that studying the universe should
last
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, I strongly believe that it can be
cancelld
(of events) no longer planned or scheduled
cancelled
concealed
. On the one hand, it can be argued that
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exploration
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 brought a number of spin-off technologies in our modern life.
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, GPS, satellite TV or weather
forcast
predict in advance
forecast
 systems were
initially
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 created in aerospace industries that we enjoy the benefit of the invention in our daily lives.
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, advocates of learning the universe
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 claim that future advantages can be expected.
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, due to the demographic
explosure
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposure
 in our planet, aerospace industries are now trying to find places to
immigrate
leave one's country of residence for a new one
emigrate
 where is appropriate for people who live
in
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on
 the Earth.
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, despite the advantages of
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exploration
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, I side with those who feel that exploring into the
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 should be discontinued.
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, since the premier launch of
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 shuttle, habitants of the earth left a lot of wreckages and rubbish of shuttles and
space
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 machines in the universe, which can bring about a severe
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 pollution problem later on. Another concern of studying the
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 is the victims caused from
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exploration
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. Take astronauts example, there are many astronauts who injured from the excursion of
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 that some of them even suffer from lifetime physical damages. What's more, not only human beings were injured in the course of the
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exploration
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, but many animals
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 got involved with it as experiments.
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, my strongest argue is that the budget invested
to
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in
space
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 research is too massive but gain little beneficial outcomes. When it comes to poor people who suffer from famine locally and globally,
this
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exorbitantamount
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exorbitant amount
 of money for
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 investment is unjustifiable. In short,
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space
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 research offered several beneficial technologies to our daily lives, the high cost budget for little impacts
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for
 studying
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 is justifiable.
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, on balance, I wholeheartedly believe that exploring into
space
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 should be scaled back.
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