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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate. Give reasons for your answer, and support your essay with ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The question of whether to save or spend
money
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 is very topical today, as so many people are struggling with financial worries. There are valid arguments on both sides, which I will discuss now. On the one hand, it is often said that spending
money
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 is one way to relax and enjoy life,
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for instance
 by shopping or taking holidays, and there is certainly some truth in
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, we usually have no choice but to spend quite a large proportion of our available salary on day to day expenses
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 as food, housing and transport, and so there is surprisingly little remaining to save anyway.
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, spending
money
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 on products and services boosts the economy and creates employment, and in
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 sense is a worthwhile action.
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, other people point out the dangers of reckless spending,
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 on frivolous or unnecessary items, which is often encouraged by advertising. Young people
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 are vulnerable to being influenced like
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.
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, advocates of saving often point out that, without a reserve of funds for emergencies, unemployment or illness, people are putting themselves
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in
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 of hardship or even bankruptcy.
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 is especially true in the current economic situation.
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 on
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 side of the debate, people emphasise the need to accumulate wealth during one’s lifetime, so that one’s children can inherit
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 or property which will increase their security and standard of
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Living
. Overall, I tend to agree that it is wiser to save
money
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 wherever possible, for reasons which benefit both individuals today and future generations.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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