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In the past, people spent their entire lives doing one job. But nowadays, they change their jobs frequently. Please give the reasons and your suggestions.

#people #lives #job #change #jobs #suggestions
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There used to be a time when
job
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 hopping is considered to be unusual and not really a good example of loyalty, but things changed now, thousands of employees moved from one
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 to another
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 a rapid rate of change. Conventional reasons for
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 trend generally are lousy bosses, miserable salaries or hostile working environment.
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, there are some fundamental reasons to explain for
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job
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 hopping frenzy that many people may have never noticed. The
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 and
inretrievable
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in retrievable
 changes in social and political life are attributed to the
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gradual
 high frequency of
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job changing
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changing job
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Nowaday
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Nowadays
, people don’t take the amount of employees staying back with the company as a measure of loyalty anymore.
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, employers would put emphasis on ensuring how engaged and committed their employers present
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at
 the time of their working with the company.
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, there is a scope for employees to find new
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 after
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 hopping,
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 feel free to control their self-development in their own pace. Despite the rapid change in social life, employers can find other solutions
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for
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 quitting problem. It is considered that employers are fed up with their current jobs because the
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 is far from their expectations.
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, work is overload, training and promotion don’t come through, or because employees misrepresents pay offers. To narrow expectation, HR manager should sample
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 experience before the interview to give a more complete picture of the
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 that candidates would be committed to work in.
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