The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The increasing number of obese people
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is
this
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opine that, physical Suggestion
Many
education
lessons should be part of school curriculum to Use synonyms
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health related issues caused by overweight population. In my opinion, physical an engagement fought between two military forces
combat
education
lessons should be taught at academic level.
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detoriating
health system problems, the importance of physical become worse or disintegrate
deteriorating
education
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must be instill
at junior level. As children are eager to learn new things and adopt Suggestion
must instill
healthy life style
. Suggestion
a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
For instance
, many schools in Pakistan have allocated fix time to create awareness among Linking Words
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young ones
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revealed around seventy five percent of people vigilantly Suggestion
Statistics
excercise
daily to live the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
healthy life
and follow Suggestion
a healthy life
healthy lives
this
routine from childhood.
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Moreover
, academic activities Linking Words
begets
awareness in society. Healthy sports Suggestion
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competitions
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motivate them to keep themselves happy. Ultimately, a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
pupils
this
motivation is transferred to family and society, as Linking Words
parent
not only Suggestion
parents
a parent
listen
them, perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
in addition
, they try to create Linking Words
healthy environment
for them. Suggestion
a healthy environment
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, In our school sports week used to Linking Words
held
every year, Suggestion
hold
studets
were enthusiastic a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
beacause
of attractive prizes for for the reason that; on account of
because
winner
. Suggestion
winners
the winner
THIS
HAS POSITIVE IMPACT ON FAMILLIES AND YOUNG counterparts, as it leads to Linking Words
adoption
of Suggestion
the adoption
healthy lifestyle
. Along with Suggestion
a healthy lifestyle
excercise eating
healthy food was encouraged to stay fit. One clear example is my grandparent motivated me to keep myself healthy for Accept comma addition
exercise, eating
exercise eating
annual sports week
by drinking milk
To conclude, In my view, to decrease Suggestion
an annual sports week
the annual sports week
burden
of overweight people on Suggestion
the burden
healthcare system
, school curriculum must include physical Suggestion
healthcare systems
the healthcare system
education
classes. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
this
approach will be necessary in foreseeable future.Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite