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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Style of dress in
work place
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the work place
a work place
 is a very important for many
organization
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organizations
. They encourage their employees to wear casual clothes or even designer clothes to look more smart and
beauty
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beautiful
beautifully
, while others prefer to improve the
performance
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 of their employees. The latter believe that the quality of working is more valuable. So, which one is more important? Many of famous organizations assign a remarkable budget to the clothes and uniforms of their members. According to their annual estimate indices, their success directly is in relation with
members
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member's
 appearance.
Moreover
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, those indices show that people have
tendency
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tended
 more to that organization have
attraction
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attracted
 in the appearance. It seems that smart dresses and good looking in
work place
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a work place
 not only increase the success, but
also
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 they make there more beautiful and it may lead to better
performance
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 of the members.
On the other hand
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, other organizations value the efficiency of their employees, more. In their belief, the
performance
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 of each one is in prior of their
looking
a feeling of pleasure and enjoyment
liking
.
For example
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, employees in many companies wear a very simple uniform,
however
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 the mentioned companies program many professional courses to enhance the
employees
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employees'
employee's
 ability. Personally, I believe the question depends on the organization activities. I mean the ones are directly working with people, like shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and department stores, hospitals, and so on, value the appearance more. People expect the beauty and they have to answer to
this
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 request in the best manner.
In contrast
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 with
this
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 the organizations, which work with people indirectly, tend to focus on the
performance
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. Employees of companies, workshops and so on have to improve their ability, not to dress smartly.
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