Government give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some would argue that it is correct to finance artists by government. While others say
this
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money could be used on other projects. An artist needs financial help in the initial stage of their career.
However
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, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
there are other
departmenets
a specialized division of a large organization
departments
to give importance
such
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as
health
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care
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. On the one hand, in
early stage
Suggestion
the early stage
of an artist needs funds to master in it and showcase their talent. To learn all crafts of movie making is only possible at an international
film
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schools
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school
and it is every expensive for a middle class person to get into reputed
film
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university.
For example
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, Indian
film
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director Raja
mouli
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Mouli
male
who went on to win four national awards for his best movies, He got
finance
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financing
from the state government to study
in
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at
New York
Suggestion
the New York film academy
film
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academy in the initial years of his career.
However
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, I believe
this
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does not solve problems in our society. Government
first
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invests in
health
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care
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which can be beneficial to
evevryone
all people
everyone
.
On the other hand
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, investing in
health
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care
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are
Suggestion
is
very important and
it
it is
it's
the best option because everybody gets benefit out of it. In every country diabetes is the major
health
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problem. If state funds in diabetes research it will solve entire country’s problem.
For example
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, in India any decades ago,
new born
recently born
newborn
babies were suffering from polio
then
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Indian government made a huge investment in the Polio research, after
few years
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a few years
this
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problem got solved completely. To conclude,
Istrongly
Suggestion
I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
Government should
first
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invest in the
mojor
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
problems of the
societ
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
Soviet
like
health
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care
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and
then
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invests on artists.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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