Government give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#government #support #artists #people #waste #money

Some would argue that it is correct to finance artists by government. While others say

this

money could be used on other projects. An artist needs financial help in the initial stage of their career.

However

, I

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

there are other

departmenets

a specialized division of a large organization

departments

to give importance

such

health

care

. On the one hand, in

early stage

Suggestion

the early stage

of an artist needs funds to master in it and showcase their talent. To learn all crafts of movie making is only possible at an international

film

schools

Suggestion

school

and it is every expensive for a middle class person to get into reputed

film

university.

For example

, Indian

film

director Raja

mouli

Suggestion

Mouli

male

who went on to win four national awards for his best movies, He got

finance

Suggestion

financing

from the state government to study

Suggestion

New York

Suggestion

the New York film academy

film

academy in the initial years of his career.

However

, I believe

this

does not solve problems in our society. Government

first

invests in

health

care

which can be beneficial to

evevryone

all people

everyone

On the other hand

, investing in

health

care

are

Suggestion

very important and

it is

it's

the best option because everybody gets benefit out of it. In every country diabetes is the major

health

problem. If state funds in diabetes research it will solve entire country’s problem.

For example

, in India any decades ago,

new born

recently born

newborn

babies were suffering from polio

then

Indian government made a huge investment in the Polio research, after

few years

Suggestion

a few years

this

problem got solved completely. To conclude,

Istrongly

Suggestion

I strongly

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

Government should

first

invest in the

mojor

of greater importance or stature or rank

major

problems of the

societ

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

Soviet

health

care

and

then

invests on artists.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

263 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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